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Ill make myself a man from bits and bobs:a lock of hair, a shoe, a photo tornfrom GQ magazine. Ill name him. Bobs a solid, manly name, the kind thats borneby solid, manly sales execs. Hell wearthe...
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Clive --part psychological thriller, part arts & crafts project. Very nice, while at the same time quite quirky. I think you manage the flow of action -- except for "Well work on conversation....
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Nicely done, Clive. You have a special knack for dark humor.I know it's the fashionable thing to do, but homophones in lieu of rhymes still leave me cold. Why couldn't you name him Rob, or make him...
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Or make him out of odds and sods and call him Rod.Clive,Am I right in thinking that this is a female narrator? In which case, you seem to have left off one of the most useful accessories....Regards, Maz
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Thanks all of you for looking in and commenting.Mike - nits duly stored in my nit-o-file. Thanks for your close reading.Mary - glad you liked. The homophones came about by accident, actually. I wanted...
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Hi,I did enjoy this, having just re-read Frankenstien, I can't help but feel that there is some dreadful sequel demanded here.My only irritation was the way the poem repeated 'll words -I counted 9,...
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Clive, I commented on this over at the Gaz, yet I'll offer another few cents worth here.I'm often very critical of sonnets (particularly sonnets that are about nothing but the sonnet form), yet I...
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Hey Rob, could you please stop quoting an entire sonnet following your comments. It's such a waste of space, y'know. Thanx for listening. Read More
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I'll make a women, pull her from my sleeve, a lock of hair, a shoe, a photo torn from COSMO or IN STYLE. I'll call her Eve.Her looks will be too edgy, though, for porn. I'll give he...Read More
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